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    dots Submission Name: affairdots
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    Author: concrete_rose
    ASL Info:    31/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 43/51/34
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsaffairdots
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    innocence of a relationship defined-
    was torn down for you that night,
    the timing was just right,
    me and you and I was so different right?

    The need to have satisfaction on your behalf,
    the physical longing for something else,
    everything was in place,
    even the change in the race.

    But now apart from that-
    Silently this sits and reflects,
    upon the time of innocence gone,
    and coming together of bodies never sworn.




    Submitted on 2009-08-10 00:06:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this it like let some or something down gentaly or to let go with out a shatter or wisper i think this was a good short piece good job ....

    bloodstone
    | Posted on 2009-08-11 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      i lilke the message, the affair, redefining a relationshi, doubts after the morning after, the only thing i would suggest is be careful of the way you are rhymes. night,..... right,..... right .. tn the first stanza, makes a reader stumble a little and loose track of the emotions. my ismle observation.
    | Posted on 2009-08-10 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]


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