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    dots Submission Name: Jd's SouthEast Songdots
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    Author: JD_Heckle
    ASL Info:    19/THE Male/Briarwood
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 46/66/23
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 301
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1294



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       South East Hoodlums huh? SKillz Heckle, Machete whatever the hell you call yourself. You haven't lived the same South East life I have.


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    dotsJd's SouthEast Songdots
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    In the South east side, all is fine
    the design to make money is a very thin line
    From doin shows, to pimpin hoes
    the night glows as the forty four blows
    smoke....is all the life that's left
    a dead body on the street wallet gone from theft
    yet another young brother got paid in full
    water smothered a mother in her very own pool
    just to gank the necklace from her pretty young neck
    leaving her little babie's life a shitty ass wreck.
    That's the life we live, all the way down here
    walkin the South east streets without feeling or fear

    "Y'all family better recognize
    representing the South East side till I die"

    Poverty? no I don't call it a ghetto
    I call it a home ask my homeboy Beto.
    We've been here living in the dirt roads
    trying to make ends meet as our wallet implodes
    I have no House, I don't even have a car
    I'm not in a ritzy ass place eating caviar
    I don't care to be rich, Im fine with my friends
    not a Wealthy little bitch, I don't follow any trends
    people will criticize, but it's okay
    Livin where I have I fear nothing anyway.....




    Submitted on 2004-07-19 03:47:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is pretty damn good. Very real. You talk about your loyalty and being true to who you are. Too many people are out there trying to put on their airs and be who they aren't.

    I really loved the lines:

    "We've been here living in the dirt roads
    trying to make ends meet as our wallet implodes
    I have no House, I don't even have a car
    I'm not in a ritzy ass place eating caviar
    I don't care to be rich, Im fine with my friends
    not a Wealthy little [censored], I don't follow any trends
    people will criticize, but it's okay
    Livin where I have I fear nothing anyway..."

    Can I offer a suggestion on that last line. .."Living where I have...Might flow better as "Living where I do." When you say "living where I have...makes it sound like you used to be there and left.

    One other line: "I call it a home ask my homeboy Beto." The thing is, it made me laugh and the piece was too serious to be laughing about. I like the first part but the homeboy Beto part was kind of weak.

    This is a great rap. Strong and full of character.


    | Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]



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