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    dots Submission Name: Take Me As I amdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Rant/Angry
    Total Views: 668
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 621



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       you took pieces of me that will never be found... you have left me holy.. for that Mother I can never forgive you


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    dotsTake Me As I amdots
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    Take me as I am,
    for I will never be as you've always hoped.

    No I will never become another version of yourself,
    my actions will not mirror your own!

    I will one day stand on my own,
    with support from no one,
    No not even a man!

    Take me as I am,
    for I will only disappoint!

    I have never jumped when you've said jump
    What makes you think, things have changed?

    Taking a stand I am,
    against you,
    for me!

    So here are all my goodbye,
    Farewell,
    and good luck!




    Submitted on 2009-08-11 01:12:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoyed the majority of it ^-^

    With a little upgrade in the punctuation and a catchy title i'm sure this poem will do wonders for you..

    The only part that I found a bit confusing was when you said Take me as I am, and then at the end, So her are all of my goodbye's.

    < Oh, and just for a little heads up dissapoint is spelled wrong up there, :] <--- Friendly tip, not trying to be mean. >
    | Posted on 2009-08-11 00:00:00 | by Kykaru | [ Reply to This ]


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