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    dots Submission Name: Fragile Heartdots

    Author: Keller
    ASL Info:    18/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 36/26/17
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsFragile Heartdots

    Do you know what fragility is?
    Something that can so easily break
    At the wrong touch
    At a wrong word
    Something so weak
    Yet can move mountains

    I never understood
    I never knew how

    Someone once said
    “Stay true to yourself”
    Tell me how
    When I can’t protect
    When I hold on too tight

    I am the wrong touch
    I am the wrong word
    To guard this fragility…

    And yet, there is a song in me
    I still need to sing
    I feel this life is best for me
    But it cannot be perfect
    Without you

    Can a rough hand gentle?
    Will a word change?
    The truth is yet to be known

    I need you
    All that I am
    Has been because of you
    Tell me
    How can I pass the day
    When a frown adorns your face
    When sadness fills your eyes?

    I know now
    There is a future
    The light ahead
    Is the proof
    When before there was only darkness
    Despair eating at the edges
    I think of you
    The blackness is driven away

    You’re my guardian angel
    The one I’ve been praying for

    This fragility—
    Is love.

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      Excellent, very delicate and very sensitive write! Love is as fine and as fragile as fine porcelaine; it can be very resilient when love is the handler, but very fragile when its nemises come in to play! Calloused hands can hold love gracefully, while deceitful hands can cause it to shatter no matter how gently handled!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-08-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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