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    dots Submission Name: My Muse....A Beautiful Heartdots
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    Author: telearose15
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Love
    Total Views: 549
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1025



    Description:
       Just a rant. Comments would be appreciated.


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    dotsMy Muse....A Beautiful Heartdots
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    I'm a right brained girl. I love expressing myself creatively through singing, and voicing my opinions.

    Yet, while I do this, I really would love to reach out to people. People scoff at the songs other people and me sing at our school, while we're trying to voice our ideas.

    I recently took up painting. I'm horrid at it, I don't even know what to draw. But I keep trying because, I truly beleive beauty may catch your attention, but personality and love captures your heart.

    Outward beauty only last for so long, and since 'beauty' has become such a big word, being attractive isn't entirely too special anymore.

    Inward beauty can last till the day you die, but no one seems to want to build a beautiful heart.

    I think the root of my problem is to find a muse or a feeling, but it just doesn't seem to fit.

    I want to show something that calls out to everyone, but I'm not sure how...




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      Aw, sweety, I totally understand this.


    I am in painting as well, for I believe the same type of thing that you do: that beauty is not an outward type of thing anymore, but inward. That the eyes of love and attraction are not found BY your eyes, but by your heart.


    I can relate to this completely. I favorited simply because this work spoke to me better than any that I had read. Kudos to you.


    I don't give comments without giving something nitpicky, sorry. I know that you are probably trying to emphasize an idea here, but it isn't good to repeat yourself so much. Giving real reasoning would probably touch up some of that repetitiveness.


    Keep up the good work, chika.


    (ps- I just noticed that this was written on my birthday. )
    | Posted on 2010-02-09 00:00:00 | by AshKetchumLuv | [ Reply to This ]


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