Hello there. Maybe you remember me from some time ago. Anyway, I wanted to comment about this poem, obviously. It has a nostalgic feeling, or maybe more saddening, because hope feels all lost and that is all that's left.
I found some repetition in the first and second stanza: "Life slowly passing by" and "people quickly passing by". I know you can come up with something ten times as good; or for that matter, keep it the same. Nevertheless, that is a no-brainer repetition and can be easily fixed.
I've read two of your poems and I noticed that they both have intriguing ideas in them, which appeal to me. However, your spelling isn't the best. Also, you could probably work on using more original images. That said I think your style has something a bit more fresh than usual about it, and I'll look out for more... Becky
Submission Name: Controversy of a troubled worl
