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Sight of You


Author: Raindrops
ASL Info:    25/f/Pennsylvania
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Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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Written on August 12, 2009.


Sight of You



Lord, it's so hard
not to get bogged down
with the everyday goings on
everything pulling me down

knocking me around
but my heart calls out to you
every minute of everyday
just have to close my eyes
to make it all go away

Close my eyes to shut it all out
to connect to You from deep within
without the distractions
of everyday life

If I lose my sight
take me by the hand
guide me in the right direction
to the promised land.




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  Excellent heartfelt write, with good meter and rhyme! The Lord provides salvation not only for the big things in life, but the everyday things as well!
| Posted on 2009-08-12 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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