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    dots Submission Name: naked raindots

    Author: Nagow
    ASL Info:    20/f/Denmark
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 56/70/29
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsnaked raindots

    The sweet beauty of silent flowers
    peacefully waving in the wind
    she sits there staring at them for hours
    trying to feel good in her skin

    It starts raining outside
    with a quiet beauty of tears
    there's no where to hide
    the rain uncovers her fears

    Naked she sits on the wet grass
    feeling like an open book
    she tries to let it pass
    but she doesn't know where to look

    she stands up and dances around
    letting the rain hit her skin
    now she knows what she's found
    a whole knew wind

    Submitted on 2004-07-19 07:14:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i wrote a poem somewhat like this when iw as younger...it talked about an atmosphere where i felt i could be myself. (thank you to my 9th grade lit teacher!) this looks to be about self discovery and realizing its safe to feel what youw ant to feel what you want and to be able to love youself for who you are and not feel lik eyou have to hide behind something. great write. ^5 Much Love.
    | Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by Printer Shock | [ Reply to This ]
      Should it be sweet flowers instead of sweat?

    Instead of "a whole new wind" maybe "a new way to begin."

    I like how you attach what she is feeling to what is happening in nature. That is very pretty.
    | Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      things certainly are different in scandanavia than they are here in north america.this poem had a very innocent feel to it but i certainly would never have done what you dared to do even if i was living in your country instead of mine.you are a very good writer and i will keep an eye out for more of your stuff.keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-07-19 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]

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