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    dots Submission Name: View From the Halfway Pointdots
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    Author: Shadowstar13
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 191/191/129
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Really, it strikes me often that if "purgatory" is real, Earth could very well be it.


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    I am.

    I am that which sits between demons and angels. I am your penance, I am the nine-tailed scourge sent to you so you could atone for your sins. Bow down no further before the great gods of your sins, for this is the point of no regret.


    I am all that there is; I am your Elysia, I am your Valhalla, I am your Nifleheim and your Hades. I am the continent that fell blinded from heaven and ran screaming out of hell, my scorched turf to serve as home for souls good enough for neither.


    I sit between blinding light and the deafening screams of ashes rising on black flame.
    No, I sit between two voids, in the middle of that which is utter and vast. I am all there is. There is nothing from this point out.
    Nonsense, I am a goddess in and of myself.
    No. I am where the Big Bang divided by zero.

    And even I am often unsure.

    There are those who dance in spirals here. Yet there are also those who chant in low voices and bow before crucibles. There are those who believe in nothing and those who believe everything.
    Bloody fools.


    What, tell me, is there truly? I seem to have lost the compass that tells me my orbit. I see no sun, I see no stars, I do not even see myself.

    What is there?




    Submitted on 2009-08-12 07:27:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I am all there is."

    "Negative! primitive! limited! I let you live!"

    "But I gave you life."

    "What else could you do?"

    "To do what was right!"

    "I'm perfect! are you?"


    - from Karn Evil 9, 3rd Impression, Emerson, Lake, and Palmer.

    Nowadays, many people do not know what they can be sure of.

    Well, you can be sure of one thing right now: this is a damn good poem. Moody, dark, and infused with just the right amount of mythology.

    Also, I couldn't help but think of 'the goddess' when I read this, seeing as I know you are a Wiccan. I can see a being who is angered at the mindless destruction of nature and of the Earth in general. And I have to agree with you, it seems than mankind has made Earth into a sort of 'purgatory'.

    Many things to contemplate in this piece. I really liked the 'Big Bang divided by zero' line. That pretty much solidifies this as awesome.

    Yeah, I don't really know what else to say, and I don't want to ramble and waste your time. I just want you to know that I really like this. It appeals to my dark side. MWAHAHAHAHA.
    | Posted on 2009-08-12 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]


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