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    dots Submission Name: Say What?dots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsSay What?dots
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    Say What?

    You told me life demanded more of us
    But I somehow failed to get that memo
    So I’ve marinated in a year long hell
    That’s begun to morph into something mellow

    I’ve left words dangling in a half cooked stew
    Like love notes meant to mend a war
    With clichés oozing mock desires
    As potent as a sailor’s tryst with whores

    I’ll return that call I meant to take
    As soon as something dances in my skull
    Worthy of remembrance, or at least
    Worthy to fill the vacuum of this shell




    Submitted on 2009-08-12 15:15:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hwat to say
    perhaps jumbo mumbo?
    laser disc
    telephone
    internet
    hi-speed
    hi-def modernization
    sensation dysentery
    scanning retina machina
    skyscraper!

    electronic
    paper!

    download
    upload
    mainstream
    downstream
    coffee dream
    beanery
    generation why
    beat and poetry
    sputnik
    satellite
    troglodyte
    aphrodite
    hermaphrodite

    hermes
    teleport
    virtual insanity
    reality
    and

    a good
    dose of

    apathy

    coz all we got
    is

    electronic
    paper!

    fingerboard
    keyboard
    figureskating youtube
    google
    torrent
    mnemonic
    moronic
    mormon
    and a good

    dose
    of

    scientology
    gynecology
    genome
    phermone
    hormone
    homonym
    homo
    sapien

    bless my soul
    coz all we got is

    electronic paper!
    | Posted on 2011-09-02 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this...but just one thing i longed for...

    a cooking reference in the last stanza to complete the trilogy!

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-30 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh the soul is sleeping even as the mind begins to wake

    the rhyme is nice and it's sort of funny as a rant

    hope you're well Billious

    Love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2010-02-06 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      THAT, i suppose would be best.


    | Posted on 2009-08-16 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the imagery and wonderful way the words mixed. The second verse was so well written, I particularly liked these "With clichés oozing mock desires. As potent as a sailor’s tryst with whores"
    Brilliant.
    | Posted on 2009-08-16 00:00:00 | by fictionalfiend | [ Reply to This ]
      what.
















    (sorry. just couldn't help myself).
    | Posted on 2009-08-14 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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