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What is True


Author: Rhythmal
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Words: 28
Class/Type: Prose /Serious
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The second of Similarities


What is True



We are life without reason
eyes without seeing
Love without being
We are senseless creatures
Fools in a land of shadows
Knowledge eludes us all but a few




Submitted on 2009-08-13 00:52:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i think if you try switching the words life from line one and put it in for being in line three you would have a more solid philosophical reference one other thing there are blind people who have eyes and don't see so that would be a reason so that would be something from nothing so that would make the word fool and important one to look at and see if you can simplify blind and not cauterize with shadows... the annihilation of all possible truth by saying in the title what is true is oxymoron, cool.
| Posted on 2010-01-10 00:00:00 | by guruleocrates | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this might be your best one so far... but I haven't read them all (yet) so the jury is still out on that. Let's just say, this one speaks the most to me today.

Why why why? Everyone has a big fat WHY stuck in their throat, instead of accepting and taking some small comfort in, There is no reason. It just IS.

I stopped trusting my eyes earlier this year.... I look at least 3 times, like a broken-necked head rocker, before stepping out to cross the street.
| Posted on 2009-08-23 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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