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Radiant Goddess

Author: Rhythmal
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Part 1 of possible multitudes

Radiant Goddess

Who am I to say that you were lying
who am I to cry, while you were dying
we were followers of peace, and righteous-ness
we were beautiful, but you were more than I
Your radiance, your shining heart, your beauty made the sun look black
You were the goddess, the shadow of a song
Your blood was music, your spirit pure, your soul was perfect, your tone so sure.
We were glorious, glorious and strong, and you, you were more than I,
more than I ever was, and ever shall be

Submitted on 2009-08-13 01:08:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like how this is written. especially love the way you ended it. at the beginning you wrote about betrayal than the whole "what we used to be" than admiration...or perhaps envy, and that's what I liked, the transitions. at first I thought it was about friendship gone bad, but I discover it's actually love gone bad. it had a nice beat to it. my favorite part: "Your blood was music..."

thanks for sharing. :)
| Posted on 2009-08-13 00:00:00 | by kumabox | [ Reply to This ]
  beauty that could turn the sun black, is a wonder of beauty itself ,.You flow is smooth, the words used make the picture complete .
thank you for the message.
| Posted on 2009-08-13 00:00:00 | by radarlove | [ Reply to This ]

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