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    dots Submission Name: burning bridgesdots
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    Author: FadedSilence
    ASL Info:    21/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    1.24 - 124/113/51
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 960
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1584



    Description:
       ok, so ive been away for awhile so please forgive the lack of punctuation ect.


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    dotsburning bridgesdots
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    When all the world is gone to you
    not a single soul to call out to
    your bridges burned and ropes untied
    all thats left is your pool of lies
    the last road ended two miles ago
    no more turns and nothing to show
    for all the scars and battle wounds
    struck out of the game nothing left to lose
    and all the ones that stood by your side
    you left for dead next to your pride
    with no remorse and no regret
    and you havent learned your lesson yet

    you spun your web and now youre stuck
    once again you escape -- must be luck
    it will run out and you'll face your demons
    reality's here and life's getting even
    for all you took must be returned
    karmas a bitch and you will learn
    one day when youre in a bind
    i wont be there by your side
    youll stand alone --no one left
    all the ones you should have kept
    theyre long gone, myself included
    all the memories of your past - deluded

    i hope your next wont be your last
    the lane your in is for driving fast
    and your tagging along passing life by
    with your hybrid car fueled with lies
    when it overheats and no one comes,
    think of all the dirt youve done
    while youre stranded and broke down
    we drive past -- not turning around
    not this time, youve dug your grave
    no ones coming to save the day
    now youre standing in a 6ft deep hole
    hate to say i told you so.






    Submitted on 2009-08-13 03:16:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow.This is truly amazing.There isn't much else to say other then it is an awesome work and you should continue on this road.
    | Posted on 2010-01-06 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow thats really deep and powerful. I can't do rhymes well but you can. I'm a tad jealous actually. Keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by extrEMO | [ Reply to This ]
      could use some revision, but otherwise pretty good
    | Posted on 2009-08-14 00:00:00 | by Rhythmal | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a work in porgress , life twist and turns this is true. people do what you have said. an yes. it's weird. I like you creation of truth. the creation shows heart.
    | Posted on 2009-08-13 00:00:00 | by radarlove | [ Reply to This ]


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