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What are we.


Author: Rhythmal
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What are we.



We are imposters and fools
dispicable ghouls
Creatures with no right to be.
Nay! I say, we're bright shining rays
of light in the night as all shall soon see
So let the darkness take flight we'll drive it away
As the coming of dawn brings the day




Submitted on 2009-08-14 00:38:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You're always a bit dark, but you're optimistic in all of your poetry... even if it's about death, it's an optimistic result that you come up with. I like that. It's Knight-ish, almost, to always see the good saving graces of the human race, to feel there is hope. It's not "hope" I pick up from your poetry, but this... optimism, for lack of a better word.
| Posted on 2009-08-30 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
  very interesting, dark and mystical , very detailed, strong feelings and emotions on the way you wrote this poem, well written Chris
| Posted on 2009-08-14 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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