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    dots Submission Name: Feeling For You Alwaysdots
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    Author: Christo89
    ASL Info:    20/M/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 411
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1338



    Description:
       This is my first poem so be critical if you wish..
    but not to harsh haha
    I wrote this about 4 months ago when i was over come with emotion and decided maybe i should write a poem.. so ya


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    dotsFeeling For You Alwaysdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I'm Defanatly not perfect
    And I know i'm not the only one for you
    But that does not mean il stop trying
    To be with you

    My love for you can not be denied
    And in me you can confide
    All your secrets
    And all your fears
    Even the ones that make you shed tears
    I will be there for always
    I will protect you and keep you safe
    Why you may ask?
    Because I love you
    The way you smile
    It goes for miles
    And to be with you
    Will make me smile
    Every mile
    That i'm with you

    I may not have a big list of pros
    But I will treat you like a queen
    I cant bring you riches
    But I will give you my heart
    The whole thing not just a part
    You deserve the best
    And I know i'm not better then the rest
    But I cant stop trying to be the one for you
    Because you are the only one for me

    If you decide that i'm not the one for you
    I will gracefully step aside so you can persue
    The type of man you deserve
    The role I could never serve
    Because all I want is for you to be happy
    If its not with me
    I will understand why
    But I can not deny
    The feelings I have for you




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