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    dots Submission Name: It Seethesdots
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    Author: harrieart
    ASL Info:    21 / Male / Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 11/5/13
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 47
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 761



    Description:
       Feelin' funky tonight. Vented funkiness through text-flavored brain-puke. The end.


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    dotsIt Seethesdots
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    Vomit-inducing
    Mildly seducing
    Intoxicating debris.
    Found in my mind
    Desperately trying
    To get a hold on me.

    Oh negativity
    Your yawn opened my mouth
    A ploy, a trick
    To push that thick
    And jagged blade on south

    Quick enough I was
    To avoid a slit throat
    A second-split
    Enough to spit
    The red of blood's coat.
    But scatter!
    There's a dagger
    Waiting at the back
    A shift of garment;
    Tugging arms
    To brace the blade's attack.
    I squeal, I squeal!
    I'm falling!
    Cold slap of ground is quick
    To tell my senses they are leaving
    As numbness heals my sick.




    Submitted on 2009-08-15 03:08:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      woah.

    I totally loved this one. in no way would this be brain puke..maybe text-flavored if you mean it has a frickin entire story in the little amount of space youve written in!

    I cant pick out a favorite line, but I felt like you had a lot of flow with this one, and overall I have no critiques. Im glad I clicked on your post!
    | Posted on 2009-08-16 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]



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