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Submission Name: Shoulders dots

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Author:	Alilia
Elite Ratio:	1.14 - 6/27/33
Words:	36

Class/Type:	Poetry/Political
Total Views:	57
Average Vote:	3.0000
Bytes:	288

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Shoulders dots

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The weight of the world
Falls on the shoulders
Of those who care
Only the rich and powerful
Will cause them more pain
For the world rests on
The poor and lonely

Submitted on 2009-08-15 15:58:17 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I agree. Very interesting how you can get something so deep out of a simple thing like shoulders isn't it?
| Posted on 2009-09-15 00:00:00 | by extrEMO | [ Reply to This ]

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