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    dots Submission Name: Lies Charade; Travesty Truthdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsLies Charade; Travesty Truthdots

    Lies Charade; Travesty Truth

    Do you feel hurt
    Did you see the pain

    Did you judge it by your own collection of glass breakages
    Or by a joint account in crystal

    Did you see yourself shatter
    Or by more, see the desperation of truth
    As it called to you
    With its unity of suffering

    Were you; in that moment; painted by the brush strokes of love
    Or where you written out of context so fully
    And did not seize upon your complicity
    To agony

    Fickle heart that judges every pain by its own demand
    For tears
    And cannot delve between the layers
    And see its own

    Loves confession breeches in a torment
    And lays naked
    Exposed in all its wounds
    Is it then to be picked amongst with discerning chopsticks

    If so; then so be it
    Maybe it is a willy-nilly choice you pick

    Do you feel hurt
    Can you see the pain

    Or did someone tear open their being
    And let you look inside

    Was I honoured for such a black descent
    Did I break apart
    Everything that I am
    And lay naked raw at your feet

    Not enough it seems

    Not enough to hold you in faith and belief
    I have no place here

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