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    dots Submission Name: Emotional Suicidedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 271
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
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    dotsEmotional Suicidedots

    Emotional Suicide

    I hate this plastic
    This glass screen and its even more plastic surrounding
    And this finger tapping keyboard
    With its alphabet and numbers
    So dead until I touch them

    They do not have one iota of conveyance in their spirit

    Until you know the pits to where passion can descend
    For itís waiting and wanting
    How can it write out your soul

    Blank pages of pretty verse and prose

    But impalpable and palpable tourniquets
    In constrictions so placeless
    Should they wrench and how do they yank
    Confiscate the entrails of dreams
    And leave you dragging and demanding
    And for all your lungs would burst
    Into the void of a night you canít remember

    Stars and Gods canít you hear me !
    Canít you see how torn apart
    I love her !

    But do they care

    This smooth lifeless excuse for touch
    And computerised pixels through glass
    Black on white lines
    Say so much but donít do too much
    Behind the programmers masterpiece of electrical binary

    Itís an emotional suicide
    An excuse for skin
    A replacement for hands and lips and breasts
    Sweat and hot hard heavy breathing
    A mere doppelganger for eventually leave me
    In this presence of alone-ness
    Plastic cripple of computerised loveless

    Just the Internet
    Thatís all it is
    In a defile and hate of compressed
    Just a lynch pin
    And a hangmanís noose
    To dangle yourself with

    Just love in an airway of satellites
    Paid for by monthly direct debits

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