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    dots Submission Name: Too Much Not To..dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 663
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsToo Much Not To..dots
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    Too Much Not To..


    How many times have I done this
    Weaved my way home
    On alcoholic ankles

    They would call it drowning your sorrows
    But; sorrow it seems, always has a new face
    And is scrubbed for its conveyance
    In the late night meandering

    Walks with the ever tinged orange street lit
    The constant song of crickets
    Repeats
    Arms around waists and pulling close
    Against the smiles and soft heat

    I see them, every day
    Hundreds of lovers
    Living their way

    But for me, not merely
    As I pass, as an iron blank mythology
    Come to trespass
    On their moment of completion

    And all the lips and poised talons
    All these relinquished sighs and gasps
    Hold me abandoned
    In the slip and fall of loneliness
    But breaks ever to the intense
    Of your skin

    I am drunk now, too many vodkas and their ice.. icing of too easy drinking
    But here I am
    Again

    Carving my heart into something
    Some way to alliterate
    And maybe literate
    Of the rent and scathe
    That misses your palm; in mine

    Turns me to such an empty night
    Where all I am is but a vacant passage
    To this moment
    Kissed upon this blessed aching
    Interminable

    I, its shadow
    Just a shadow
    In the orange tint of street lights
    Which hear the giggles and laughs of lovers
    But do not give up
    My own

    They mock me
    As even you do
    In my desperation unworthy

    How many times have I done this
    Spent hours correcting the miss-typing
    Of drunken fingers
    While trying to latch my thought and meaning
    Onto something
    Far too expressive to capture on a key board

    I; if I wrote this out
    As plain simplicity
    It would sound and read as a thousand love songs of silly

    But I am broken in these expanses of stars
    In this night that doesnt know where you are
    In this curl of too many twist and twirls
    Of unfocused cigarette smoke
    While my fingers hit down on this key board
    And misspell my love
    Re- write my love
    Re-arrange my love
    Into something tangible

    Chokes

    And every shadow and echo
    Every thought
    Every moment cognizant
    Past the vodka swill of my drunkenness
    Hinges
    Its portent
    On you

    I am dieing my love
    Dieing
    Slowly
    Surely; as steadily
    As you do

    Without me

    Too Much Not To ...... ( Mornings Reprise )


    And here I am
    In the too much sun
    Barking dogs
    Wake the morning

    Too many tears in the night
    Too much vodka last night
    Left me hit by this vacant love I am holding

    Too much in your precious eyes
    Too much to be by your side
    To wrap in my arms
    And never let go

    And here I am
    Its too bright this morning
    I want to be back in the dark
    Where I was sleeping

    Dont want to look at the day
    Dont want to spend it this way
    But the tug in my soul
    Has me crashed to the edge of surviving

    Too much in your whispered voice
    Too much in the fires of your soul
    Too much of this laughter we share
    Too much of you every where
    Too many phantoms of you there
    In the morning

    And here I am
    The aftermath of vodka is pounding
    I lost myself again
    Spent the night on the door step of this aching

    I dont want to look into my eyes
    To only recognise
    That quiet stare
    Of my heart as its breaking

    And here I am
    In the too much sun
    Barking dogs
    Wake the morning

    Too many tears in the night
    Too much vodka last night
    Left me hit by this vacant love I am holding








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      Wow what a writing! you really are talented!
    I enjoyed reading this poem.
    thankyou for sharing

    totojane
    | Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]


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