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    dots Submission Name: Flowdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    In those flowing drops of water
    Which carry the salt inside your soul
    Send their ripples to the alter
    Of the eternal human heart

    All the sorrow and pain you gather
    Is blessed inside your tears
    The sadness in your eyes
    Tells you there can be no

    To the flow of another torture
    In the damage of their lives

    Do you wake up in the destruction
    Of everything you believe
    This unity of love
    Was it just something we all dreamed

    Are we lost inside a nightmare
    Of the money print machine

    And only if we dare
    To show one another that we

    In the flowing veins of blood
    Which carry the history of our race
    Send their sacrifice ever timeless
    Never having known their place

    And hope is the drug
    We can never get enough of

    All the sorrow and pain your gather
    Is blessed inside your tears
    The sadness in your eyes
    Tells you there can be no

    And only if we dare
    To show one another that we

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      wow kinda sad but writen with a strong emotion and had me glued to the page.
    I loved it.
    | Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]

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