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Vampire I

Author: Rhythmal
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It looks better when I can use italics. oh well maybe I'll fix it later.
This is part 1 of what I hope shall become a series, depending on how good you think it is.

Vampire I

I think not
Immortality has long been my reality
Death is a disease I shall not contract
I sold my spirit long ago,
my heart has turned to coal
As an immortal my trinity is
body mind and soul
One thousand years I�ve waited,
ten thousand yet to come
I�ve watched humanity struggle
to understand mortality.
And I wonder why they bother
Its as if they think they can defeat the force
That has long since killed their fathers
Death is a disease, malevolent and intelligent
An evil thing indeed
I was a fluke, myself and my kind
I saw my chance and I took it
Others did the same, back when it was common to see a demon or an angel walk the land

Though I admit I was unique in my choice of trinity.
At least, at first, but of course the second I did it
So did fifty other wussy losers about to commit suicide
They all thought �hey! Look at that, that guy just sold his spirit I�ll copy him�
I guess they figured it be an easy way to get immortality �with only a few strings attached�
Small side effects may include: The strong desire to drink blood, Elongated canines, the occasional �bat-wing-like� growths on your back,
�Mild� allergic reactions to Garlic
and a tendency to become nocturnal.

Yeah. That worked real well.

Submitted on 2009-08-17 00:05:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the concept of vampirism being "symptomatic." I personally thought your ending was great, and it was amusing and kept me entertained. That is a major compliment, btw, because I detest anything "Twilight" (Nope, don't have to see it, already heard enough and saw the actors/actresses... uh uh.) I think Anne Rice, that wordy over-adjectively [censored]slinging biotch who did and re-did and OVER-did Lestat and the Mayfair Witches, should be chained naked to a truck bumper and dragged at 85 mph across an interstate of police stop-sticks, THAT is how badly I despise her. About the only one that I'm looking forward to is Tim Burton's remake of "Dark Shadows" with Johnny Depp that is coming next year (fingers crossed).

It's not the vampire theme, mind you... I like them much. I just hate the latest interpretations that are coming out about them. I like yours because it was funny, and it gave it a new twist... something to ponder, instead of reasons to roll my eyes and mutter, I've gotta kill Anne Rice for starting all this...
| Posted on 2009-08-31 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
  I laughed at the Symptoms. This is an interesting look at Vampires. It's not part of the romantic Twilight phase at the moment.
I enjoyed the "Death is a disease I shall not contract" ideal behind all this.
Very well done.
| Posted on 2009-08-26 00:00:00 | by fictionalfiend | [ Reply to This ]
  This was an interesting piece. But it seemed to me as if you got bored nearer you got to the last verse.

I had fun reading it though. I believe I understodd what you were trying to say (if anything at all) but I guess keep up the good work and you'll always get better.
| Posted on 2009-08-17 00:00:00 | by KindredSpirit | [ Reply to This ]

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