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    dots Submission Name: Quicksanddots
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    Author: col13x
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    Quicksand



    Where do all those still, lifeless moments hide
    In a dark quicksand of nothing
    Untouchable

    Yet they force me to the present
    And I must open my eyes
    Pupils with hidden places inside
    Never latch the daylight

    The padlocks and keys
    To my memory box
    That dead half-light
    Where no one recalls
    How I came to be this way
    In this unspeaking coffin
    Of memories

    I cannot even scream

    But lay burial brooding
    Bitter, repentant, in an endless darkness
    Of some other persons defilement
    And I am ever seeking forgiveness

    What did they do to me
    What did they make me do
    Where do all those stabbed, lifeless moments
    Disappear to

    In a dark quicksand
    Of nothing
    Untouchable

    Only to emerge in their insanities bubble
    When a life time of cloak and dagger
    Is revealed
    The drunken mad man
    Steps from the shadows with a scythe of truth
    To lynch every pretence and innocence
    And reek his havoc

    Madness then, till he rages in pain
    The woe betide screams
    And uncontrollable rents the air around him
    For a lifetime of breaking
    And ending
    For a life time silently screaming into the quicksand

    Till he falls, buckled by misunderstanding
    And the understanding of tears
    In the agony swims

    And
    And

    Welcome back to the burial mound

    Where do all those still, lifeless moments hide
    In a dark quicksand of nothing
    Untouchable

    In a dark quicksand
    Of nothing
    Untouchable




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      Wow...nicely put and makes me think of memories fadding away in the beging and kinda being forced to move forward in to a new thouht, and love the title - fits beautfuly with the poem..


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    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]


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