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    dots Submission Name: Couple's Coupletdots
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    Author: vLame
    ASL Info:    21/m/lbc
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 15/18/50
    Words: 316
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 52
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2034



    Description:
       ugh, we wrote this together, too bad she never wants to see me again.

    ">" are my lines, the others are hers.


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    dotsCouple's Coupletdots
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    Come to me... though not a lover nor a fiend
    you're someone of which I dream.

    >Lately, my dreams have had a theme
    >It's of you they so often screen.

    Your dreams have tricked you man of sin
    Your heart is false and made of tin

    >Do not accuse me of such a devilish damnation
    >For my love of thee is truer than the hardest work of a crafted mason

    I do not believe your lies you tell so well
    You will pay for your treason and burn in hell

    >Well, if that is true then what of this musing
    >There is no other answer, your heart is mine so stop refusing!

    If your gaze wouldn't trap my heart at all
    Oh, but like a fly to a spiders web I fall

    >As my prey you'll be infinitely bound
    >By the love I'll give you; timeless, elegant and profound

    Your despicable trickery shall be put to an end
    No more will your luring words transcend

    >Our love is real so let's no longer carouse this charade
    >For it will only make our undying love further frayed

    Undying love? Well then let this love die
    No more shall my heart with you sigh

    >Before returns that familiar unfriendly sorrow
    >I'll just give up and restart that search for "The One" tomorrow

    Good luck dear sir, for you'll never meet another woman like me
    You'll end up sorry with a broken heart filled with tragedy.

    >Oh, you called my bluff!!!
    >You know I'll chase you through the thickest thick, the roughest rough!

    Love is to confusing to bother with it so
    You'll be here today and now, but someday you'll let me go.

    >You have no hypothesis to support that theory
    >It is something you don't believe, but you must, merely




    Submitted on 2009-08-18 00:16:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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