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    Author: Lilyan
    ASL Info:    1 Elite Years
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 42/38/26
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 55
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 598



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       I know what that something is and was at this moment. But not all understand what I really ment.


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    dotsSomething..dots
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    They touched my soul with frozen gray eyes. They played games and then threw it away. Obscure took it over and laugh at my weekness. Now I am just shivering with this silence in my empty white room. But there is still some serenity, even I swelter in this freezing place. I know that someday, they give me back my repaired soul, so I could dance under the rainbow again. I know that all they do, is for me, even though it causes anguish. This is just something, that I have to experience once again. This is something, that all have felt in their lives. This is something...what is hard to explain.




    Submitted on 2009-08-18 06:12:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel a vision flowing in your poem, agressive verbage, very descriptive , well written

    Chris
    | Posted on 2009-08-19 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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