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    dots Submission Name: Walking Sidewaysdots

    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 662
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Who loves Short-shorts?
    Not to be taken too seriously, Meant in an almost comedic way.

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    dotsWalking Sidewaysdots

    Keep taking and leave me my shell,
    I told you once and again I say,
    Things will work themselves out,

    But, it seems I say that an awful lot.
    When I shoulda thought this through,
    I just jumped in. Head first,
    Didn't mean to.

    So how am I suposed to know?
    Haven't ever been here before,
    Just talking to hear myself,
    Not really sure.

    Submitted on 2009-08-18 07:31:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    i read your poetry and think...dang.
    i wish i could write like that.
    | Posted on 2009-08-18 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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