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    dots Submission Name: Alcohol.....dots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsAlcohol.....dots
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    I used to think that drinking was fun,
    I would drink all day and remember nothing,
    I used to think it was so cool,
    Untill I realized I was just a fool,
    I used to think I could stop when ever I wanted untill the day they put me in detox,
    And I had withdrawls,
    I thought I knew what was going on,
    I had things right and they were just wrong,
    I was just doing what everyone else did,
    Drinking everyday and night,
    Telling myself its okay its alright,
    It took me a couple days locked up to realize my mistakes,
    And that I am the only one to blame,
    I couldn't focus I couldn't seem to be able to do anything, I couldn't even think clearly,
    thats when it came to me maybe something is wrong with me,
    Cause I couldnt get my mind off alcohol...





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    ||| Comments |||
      You misspelled "untill" (until), and "withdrawls" (withdrawals), and you don't seem to take time to post anything correctly, you just slap it up there like a blind drunk. But I guess you are, from this. Nice you're kicking the alcohol, now get some spell check.
    | Posted on 2009-08-23 00:00:00 | by therealmojymo | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm a recovering alcoholic, so I know the problem well. Drinking in moderation is healthy and adds gusto to life. But once one crosses the line into alcoholism, abstaining totally is the only way! But, being sober every day beats being drunk any day!

    Nice write that will help many!
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Yep... know this one all too well ....
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]


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