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    dots Submission Name: Do not read . . . draft. . . dots
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    Author: Scaredheart
    ASL Info:    15/ Female/ NC
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 92/62/50
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 49
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 804



    Description:
       Just a draft, nothing that's a piece fo art work or anything. In fact if you're looking at this please go to a differnet piece of mine >< I'm just writing this down so I wont forget it later.


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    dotsDo not read . . . draft. . . dots
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    Does it look like I'm falling apart,
    can you see my knees shaking?
    Do I seem so unstable,
    do I act like I'm ready to plead?
    When I talk,
    can you hear my voice quaver?
    When I walk,
    can you see me?

    Cause I'm falling to bits,
    my knees are falling out from unerd me.
    The world around me stays the same,
    I'm the only thing that's changed.
    I want to hear their thoughts,
    do they think of me?

    I don't believe a word you say,
    how could you love something like me?
    Why do I sit here typing these things,
    I'll never tell you what I really fee.
    I'm too scared of what you'll think,
    I'm not the saem girl I was . . .




    Submitted on 2009-08-18 19:37:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well despite a few typing errors i actually think this is really good. i agree that some of it is rough. But all in all it has certain qualities, and i am glad i took the time to read it, whether you think that it is good or not.

    Chaninie

    | Posted on 2009-10-29 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]


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