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    dots Submission Name: Laid All Outdots
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    Author: Old
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 69/97/93
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    I have traded the devil everything I got
    for an earth filled to the core with rot.
    When he offered I didn't spare passing thought,
    but now it's disappeared.
    Death has been seen in everyones eyes.
    Just as they feared
    end will come to everything despised.

    There's nothing everywhere;
    Wherever that is.
    It's but a thought from here;
    Black emptiness.

    Giving roses to the plastic angels
    I hum my hopes and dreams away.
    Threads of the fabric of reality dangle.
    Time comes in beautiful tidal waves
    to wash yesterday to tomorrow.
    I have had the roads paved
    over the mass grave of my sorrows.




    Submitted on 2009-08-19 13:09:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      an overwhelming sense of doom is what this poetry elaborates and i really think that it is quite an uncommon topic to write upon. u have done a really good job with your choice of words and the way your thoughts were put down. my favorite lines would be:

    Time comes in beautiful tidal waves
    to wash yesterday to tomorrow.

    KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK
    (|:)>
    O.B
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]


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