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    dots Submission Name: .!:I Am Your Foe:!.dots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 29/75/68
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dots.!:I Am Your Foe:!.dots
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    I feel wide open
    vulnerability washes over me
    I lay out my mind
    on this walkway, so trampled.

    Fellow adventurers of this path
    stop to admire the intrepid gizmos,
    turning and gearing
    thought process clear as fog.

    Gnashing my ears,
    the ideas threaten my life.
    I must pour it out,
    drain myself of my myself.

    Writing and loathing,
    my pieces of work seem to flood.
    Radical movements of the enemy,
    by enemy I mean the mind.

    Coursing through,
    pain cradles me as a small child.
    The pain of intelligence.
    The pain of realization.

    A quick wit,
    and an arsenal of complex words,
    can render any foe to his knees.
    I am your foe.




    Submitted on 2009-08-19 16:37:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can understand this poem down to the core. It is wicked and intelligent. All to many times our type of mind is washed over as darkness and lackluster, but we know how our mind works and I believe you displayed this out greatly.

    - Dustin
    | Posted on 2009-08-19 00:00:00 | by HisNameIsNoMore | [ Reply to This ]


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