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    dots Submission Name: Infrequent Lakedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsInfrequent Lakedots
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    Infrequent Lake


    Such a brief scatter
    As a showers rain drops
    Succour the parched earth
    In its delirium of wilted heat

    You fall on me a bright cascade
    Cool balm of flow
    To knock the dusty mantles at their feet
    And for mere moments
    I am again washed clean

    Just a light banter of new replenishment
    Nectar rumbles sweet slow
    The continual inter link
    Sweetens all the spaces left in-between

    I feel myself shuck off the hard dry clay
    The visage and armouries of my solitude
    And for the brief scatter
    Of your falling rain
    I feel again as if I am holding you

    Where on the sip of exposure
    Beneath a brittle blue heated sky
    The taste of dew
    That languid and soft succulence
    Of you, cools

    Crystal tip of my waters edge
    My all to infrequent visited lake
    Should I burn for the years, the hours and the days
    Just to dip my soul
    Inside you









    Submitted on 2009-08-20 17:15:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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