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    dots Submission Name: I wonder whats out theredots
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    Author: phoenixtale
    ASL Info:    13 female Washington,Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 18/13/12
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    Description:
       Simply wondering about a world beyond earth.


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    dotsI wonder whats out theredots
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    beyond this earth, beyond this sky, I wonder what's out there. Some place different. A place I could bare. The things I could find, might blow my mind. Things I have not seen. Things to complex for my eyes. A place not as green. Who would I meet? How would they look? would they greet? Would they be violent? Would they hide and stay silent? so many questions I ask. To answer them all is more then a task.





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      Very good. It's one of those questions people always tend to ask themselves; it is one of those poems that make you wander off as you read it. Well done.
    | Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by PanKavani | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very nice and descriptive. Needs some fluidity but its good nontheless.
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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