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    dots Submission Name: Dear Lorddots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Passion
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    dotsDear Lorddots
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    Dear Lord,

    Take as I am for I am not perfect,
    Look at me as I long to be,
    Not as I have been!

    Give me your strength I hear of so often,
    I long for the power to move on,
    To forgive,
    Give me your courage for I am in need!

    Dear Lord,

    I am in turmoil,
    I am searching for answers,
    "Am I worthy enough to be forgiven"
    "Can you still love me"
    "Will I... Can I be saved"

    Dear Lord,

    Please forgive me,
    For I have sinned!
    I pray to you now in realization that I need you!
    You have been missing in my life,
    I never was able to fill this hole,

    But I now see why!






    Submitted on 2009-08-20 21:05:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is another great write.... And you are very talented have you got any more that I can check out that are like this.
    Its really put in to a nice format.

    Totojane
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is similar to my piece 'a pl ea for help' very sincere and expressive. It reveals the true nature of the human spirit to need guidance in times of need. This is well written and real.
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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