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    dots Submission Name: What You Do To Medots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 671
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1124



    Description:
       A love poem to a past lover.


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    dotsWhat You Do To Medots
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    You complete me..
    Ill follow you around
    When i get lost
    You help me to be found
    When i wander away..
    You are my bloodhound.

    I cannot ever forget
    You heal my soul.
    I have no regret.
    It is what you create
    That completes my fate..

    Your love cannot ever be late
    What you do to me
    No one can relate.
    Why am i so happy?
    It is only you.
    Chasing away the blue.

    Colors in my mind
    Revealing what is true
    Happiness i was searching to find..
    I have found in you.

    My sweet love
    Coming from above
    What can be new?
    Everyday i spend with you
    Is like a bullet breaking the seam
    I am so in love..
    I want to scream.

    I love you my sweet amber
    Your love to me
    Can be no stranger.
    Passing through time
    Each day another..
    Pulling us closer..
    May this never close
    For you are my four leaf clover.
    And i'll destroy all who oppose..

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2009-08-21 07:28:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You are writing a lot of poems in a short period of time .... writers need to do that. Be prolific, I mean. Somebody ought to express approval of that, so there y'are!
    | Posted on 2009-11-29 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      The rhyme scheme was marvelous! And the poem really did manage to grasp the genre of /passion/ exuberantly! With each word, I belive, whomever reads it could tell that there is significant meaning. Word play was astounding as well. There was a particular verse I liked a lot:

    When i get lost
    You help me to be found
    When i wander away..
    You are my bloodhound.

    Too true would that be to those who are deeply in love with each other. Yep, I think this was a good read. You did a good job, but work can always be perfected!
    | Posted on 2009-08-23 00:00:00 | by Lincesa | [ Reply to This ]


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