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    dots Submission Name: Curse Of Smiledots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A piece about how some people never smile.

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    dotsCurse Of Smiledots

    Know that i think of you today, know i feel what you face each day.
    I know sometimes it feels theres no other way.
    Sometimes i also just want to make them pay.
    Solemnly i realise, thats not the way i play.
    Slowly i retreat, turn the other cheek, bend my knees and pray.
    Atleast i am the one to smile.
    It is my priviledge, i know i may.
    Many haven't done so in a while- such an arduous task.
    To them this is just a waste of mile where they cannot don a mask.
    How to force them?
    This i ask.

    I cannot change what they mean, i just want to remove the smoke screen.
    I want to cut out the fakeness, rip open the sincerity seam.
    This is my goal i confess, my incomplete dream.
    How can you push the engine when you do not know steam?


    Submitted on 2009-08-21 08:00:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! Once again I am inspired! And impressed! This poem reminds me of so many things in my life which would be a book to write down so I wont ....
    Any way it was very enjoyable to the very end and I really liked this poem.

    Keep writing you are a inspiration to me!
    No matter what any one says you are a gift...

    | Posted on 2009-08-22 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]

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