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    dots Submission Name: Walk With the Skin of the Moondots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWalk With the Skin of the Moondots

    Walk With the Skin of the Moon

    Lay me down in the dark grass
    Come whisper your heart
    Astride my chest
    With your mantle cast
    In the chalk of the stars

    Let the midnight glisten of your lips
    Press their dreams
    To the cool dark air
    And let slip your secrets
    On the bare shoulders of love

    Place your hand upon my cheeks
    And my hand upon your breast
    And together glide the long silent tracts
    Walk with the skin of the moon
    On our nakedness

    Let the heat of your breath linger
    A panting prayer
    Before the soft tongue intones
    And let me scry inside those amber lit eyes
    All the visions and beings of truth

    Come my love, lay me down in the dark grass
    And cast your written spells
    With me arched
    Hold me for all the woman you are
    In mysteries revealed

    Bring me the scent of your fervour
    Lay me waste in the soft wet touch
    Speak to me with Kabbalahs finger tips
    And let me hear the night of eternal whisper
    There in the cradle of earth

    Lay me down in the dark grass
    Come whisper your heart
    Astride my chest
    With your mantle cast
    In the chalk of the stars

    Submitted on 2009-08-21 08:01:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      took me a while to visualize but that's only because my write-ups aren't as developed as yours in terms of "metaphors" :) your writing actually puts the reader through a journey where he/she is subjected to feel things that they feel everyday but in a manner never felt before!

    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]

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