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    dots Submission Name: Rhythm Construction dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsRhythm Construction dots

    Rhythm Construction

    All things rise and fall to their rhythm
    The chain that binds
    In its links slowly weaken
    Gradually strengthen
    As time rolls its pitch and yaw
    Its winds of South
    Its winds to East

    The oscillations flow to the need
    Foucault's pendulum swings
    On the lessons we bring to each other

    But you, my dearest friend
    Are continual tides
    Waves forever rolling in
    Pull me out to that vast ocean
    Where your heart and your soul
    Beat in rhythm
    To mine

    No pantomime face left unmasked
    No cover of cloud to hide behind
    To grapple and divulge
    Loves nakedness

    All things to their tempo
    To their orchestrated unburdening
    To their final crescendo of freedom
    But carried on those knowing wings
    The phases Luna and day to night
    Now in never ending echoes rest
    Its winds to North
    Its winds of West

    Submitted on 2009-08-21 08:02:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow! how exciting! My favorite part was the part about the hearts beating together and the soul too....wow...Such a great write enjoyable to the very end makes you wonder what happens next.

    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]

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