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    dots Submission Name: Phenomenondots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsPhenomenondots
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    Phenomenon

    With phantom words we meet
    I collide on your soul
    And recognition pervades
    In the essence of you
    Reaches into
    Me

    I know you
    I knew you

    As you touch me with deep remembrance
    Swinging out to stars
    The dreaming satellites of centres
    They long for

    A cool wash connect
    Reminders search through my blood
    To find their place
    But their quiet furnace
    Lays firelight on a bear skin rug
    Where your eyes watering
    Held mine

    Will it or was it; this time

    I knew you
    I know you

    As if your name has a thousand verbs
    Explanations tingle on my tongue
    With the taste of kisses
    Benediction

    And cellular motes hang
    Waiting for their moment of completion
    It is already written
    With finite detail
    As a fate to run my hands on your skin

    There behind the intricacies of nerve endings
    Lays its web of truth
    Memories
    Imparted inside this heart

    You know me
    You knew me







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      Interesting write that flows together nicely and was well writen. Alot of emotions are in this I can tell and alot of hard work.
    Nice job!

    totojane
    | Posted on 2009-08-22 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]


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