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    dots Submission Name: Her Bodydots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 342
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 548
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2202



    Description:
       A piece dedicated to a past lovers body. Although our ways parted my words still stand.


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    dotsHer Bodydots
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    Sleek,silky,soft... So special... Her beautiful body.
    A smouldering sweet smile on her face be all i want to see.
    Perfect peaceful serenity - her velvet body curled up beside me.
    In her body i feel patience,pleasure and control.
    She completes me and makes me whole.
    So fine my favourite memory - you next to me, holding me.
    When i'm with you - set free, there's nobody i would rather be.
    I love you uncontrollably, unconditionally, immesurably and proficiently - so easily.
    When i'm with you im collected,cool,complete...
    Only with you.
    Your unbeatable incredible passionate affectionate love pulls me through.

    Her vivid velvet body...
    Stirring up and streaking out strong,sexy,seductive feelings from inside of me.
    If this love had to become the smallest stick or seed
    I would grow a tree with greed to fill the need indeed.
    A carefully created companion forever found in you...So real...So true.
    Our love ever special - so sacred and spiritual - bound by the strongest glue.
    Oh what i've found in you - a new color to life - a lovely light blue hue.
    Never to truly fully know the transformative treasure eminent in you.
    Your honey and sugar sweet lotion be the only potion in which i brew.

    Strikingly stimulating - splendidly sensual yet casual - her kiss.
    May this be something i never have to lose or miss.
    Her kiss radiates knowingness of togetherness - a completion in union.
    A thousand moments of eternal bliss captured in her kiss...I know this.
    I must confess: All these joys i wish to harness and consume.
    For they shape and recreate - even decorate me - a flower in bloom.
    Be my foundation, forever free unconditionally with me.
    And the most fruitful future filled with fluidity i foresee.
    Penetrate my layers of luminous love, share my aether.
    This is what i want to be: You and me - forever together.

    My sweet madness for you stirs and builds up inside me.
    Only your hope, love and support can be my decree.

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2009-08-21 08:29:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this much, but it confused me a little and I had to read it twice... it was the shift between "her" and then the reference of "you" thereafter... it sounded like the "her" was a third wheel in the relationship, instead of "her" being "you"... if I'm reading that right, because I am a bit dense at times admittedly, and I might be in the wrong mindset altogether...

    But, if "her" is "you" then they should blend, and be referred to as one or the other, but not both. That's about the only major criticism I have, the rest is lovely.
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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