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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Sitting patiently watching this cloud
    to the heavens I beg aloud
    Send me my guardian by night
    and my early morning light

    Centuries have passed me by
    I'm still alone and I cry
    As I turn and look away
    I hear a loving couple say

    "Baby I love you more each day
    in my arms you'll forever stay
    You all I want, all I need
    off your love, do I feed"

    Coming back to my reality
    looking up still I plea
    Heaven I beg this of you
    send me a love, life anew......








    Submitted on 2009-08-21 08:46:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Reminds me of my first love and how I felt then lol...very good write



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    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]


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