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    dots Submission Name: Dreams past, present and futuredots
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    Author: coloredstone
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 99/60/37
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsDreams past, present and futuredots
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    There was a time when
    Grownups ruffled my hair
    Said “little kid”, and
    I ran around without a care
    In the wide world blue and green
    Birds and joy were in the air
    And flying bikes and candy clouds
    Were what I saw up there
    In the great wide ocean-ous sky
    Back then I wouldn’t dare
    Look too far ahead, afraid;
    What if—
    there was nothing there?

    But time has gone by like a reverie
    And where I was, where I have been-
    It’s all recorded like on a roll of film
    It hardly seems real that now I’m sixteen
    With things to do and hardly time, but
    Worries and darkness and things gross and mean

    But the birds still sing, and the earth is still blue and green
    And I still live, and work for my dreams.




    Submitted on 2009-08-21 08:52:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is great. :D

    I like the conventional wisdom of the piece. When we are young, we have our rose-coloured glasses. Everything is candy and dandy, and fun times are had. Little do we realize the actual state of the world, and how difficult it really is to live in it.

    *sigh*

    I know this feeling all too well. Thankfully, though, I feel I have accepted it easier than perhaps most people do. Still, that doesn't mean I don't feel melancholy about the whole situation. I do.

    Melancholy is the weirdest of feelings. :/
    It's not quite sorrow, but it's about halfway there.

    You captured all of this quite well in your poem. Kudos. Keep it up!

    -Fox
    | Posted on 2010-09-22 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice job! I like how you described the importance of dreams to you, in a unique way. Also, even though the poem looks like it goes all over the place, actually it has a steady rhyme scheme throughout it. I'm still left with your question though...what if there is nothing there?
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]


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