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    dots Submission Name: Just Maybe.........dots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 600
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    dotsJust Maybe.........dots
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    I know you have seen many things in your life,
    and you keep thinking feelings like this can't be right, Oh trust don't come easy;
    And love like this don't happen over night,
    I know you heart is troubled asking questions everyday an night.

    And you always say maybe just maybe this time things are going to be alright,
    If you just let me show you instead of repeating the same answer more than twice,
    You will see that I am here for you baby....
    And when ever you need me I'll be there for you.
    (Main Courus)
    ---------------yeah------------------
    Oh- I've also been threw many difficult things in my life, And sometimes I wonder an daydream about us when the world is sleeping tight,
    And I keep hoping you know how greatfull I am to have you in my life, without you things just would'nt be right,

    ----------Cause I need you Baby----------

    And I know that trust don't come easy,
    And love like this only come once in a life time,
    yeah--------oh, I know your heart keeps asking questions day and night,
    And all you can say is maybe just maybe things will be alright.....
    Oh, I'm here for you baby...............yeah......




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      Hey i loved it, very emotive, had a love song theme playing in my head while i was reading it and it made me happy somewhat to read it and feel the feelings your put down, its a song of longing and a need that has to be fulfilled , a request to lull the inner turmoils by the touch of another. This is a good representation of emotion and an unquenched thirst for completion. I enjoyed it. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2009-08-22 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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