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A loud bang arrived at Piotr’s ears. The sounds of tires and engines came from outside, closely followed by footsteps approaching the front door of Piotr’s home. The upstairs rumbled and shook as another bang rang down the stairs. Piotr stared at the door in terror, the footsteps outside drawing nearer before stopping. The faint sound of conversation below the noise of the vehicles was just barely audible to Piotr. His eyes were focused on the grain of the oak door that separated him from the soldiers on the other side.
A shrill scream shook Piotr to the very core of his being. The scream was shortly followed by a naked woman rushing down the stairs. Her bosoms down to her stomach were coated in a layer of fresh, crimson red blood. This sight dragged Piotr’s eyes over to the woman. Even in this warzone and in this moment of terror, Piotr couldn’t help but stifle a blush as his eyes drifted over her bare skin tainted with the red juices of his father.
The woman frantically looked around for a door, before spotting the main door and trying to escape into the streets but was immediately halted in her endeavour by the soldiers when she opened the door. They immediately turned and raised their weapons. The sounds of gunfire and desperate cries for help rang out in Piotr’s ears as he shot up from a bed in the nurse’s ward.
A thick layer of sweat covered his forehead and Piotr wiped it with the casual swipe of his hand. The was dimly lit by only a small candle burning in the corner of the room on a four-legged, square wooden table.
| Agreed with Neko, it seems great, not what the otehr one was, but just as wonderful in it's own way . .. . NOW GET BACK TO WORK!!!!! *Glomps you and snuggles you then walks off with a copy of your work to red late at night when I'm bored.*||| Posted on 2009-08-22 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ] || Awe, poor little Piotr. This piece isn't as emotional as the first, but still just as attention grabbing. You definitely have to continue writing this.|
The part about the woman appearing with blood on her was very unexpected. I really didn't expect a naked person to show up in a scene like this. Cool change. :3
It was cute, in a saddening way, how Piotr blushed and had such an adorable personality. The poor boy has to stay in such a terrible place. It makes me depressed! D:
This section of your story didn't go anywhere really, but it's still really interesting.
I would love to hear more about young Piotr.
|| Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by nekochan765 | [ Reply to This ] |