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Izabel


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Izabel



Gemstone spiders crawl through her silken hair
On my tongue she dreams on
wandering rarely from the antecedent of her lair


"Take me" she pleas
turning something to nil
morning light again bleeds
her pale skinny face still

I think our lips touched as we clasped
tightly each others throats
Staring and dreaming down on the grass

Her love the sky yawned
I felt her touch once more
and now shes gone




Submitted on 2009-08-21 18:18:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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it may be because your title is similar but the think the song fits the content too...
| Posted on 2009-09-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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