Description: sort of poem or song which everway you look at it i hope you understand it has helped me deal with a tough ex lover who would not take a hint?
But after reading this he took off i have not seen or heard from him since.
Its Over -------------------------------------------
I never felt like this before
i gave you the best of my love
and you threw it in my face
you said "dry your eyes"
"time will heal all the pain."
I don't know how to say this
i'll tell you straight from my heart
You will be back
but i don't want you back
i don't want you to know
i miss you and that
i'm still in love with you.
But i don't want you back
i don't need you back
all i wanted was it to work out
but you changed
so lets go our seprate
ways don't you know
that its over it was
over along time ago.
This is beautiful. I liked the way you seemed to be trying to convince yourself that it's over and you don't want him back. You really covered all of the emotions one goes through after a breakup.
im really likeing your poem. i can relate to it. b/c me and my ex broke up and he wants me back but he has hurt me to much. thank you soo much for ur talent. i love this poem
few typos here and there, but you got your point across, and I do think this would make him realize what your talking about, and finally get him to take the hint and finally understand what you want done with the relationship, hope it didn't hit him too hard, cause its a fair write. Over and out~Anarius~
Again, this feels more like a song to me, I can almost hear the melody as I read it. It's a very honest piece and the emotions you were feeling come across very well. The last few lines loose the rythm, you should think about the structure here.
Submission Name: Its Over
