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    dots Submission Name: This Song Is For Keeps, Hundots
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    Author: Phagocyte
    Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 2/5/5
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
    Total Views: 475
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 600



    Description:
       Really crappy and clumsy, but I wanted to write something, and the phrase "People wear depression as a fashion" floated into my mind, thus that is the main theme.

    Hope you all enjoy it and find a personal meaning to it, and thank you very much for reading it!!!


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    dotsThis Song Is For Keeps, Hundots
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    Why am I sick to the bone
    To the divas on the streets
    And I wonder if the girl is cold
    Standing at the dead traffic light
    With only a small red dress on
    With a black cardigan on her shoulders.

    Could you ever see the day
    That her life was never a mess
    And that her mangled body wasn't
    twisted upon the wooden chest.

    Thus a new fashion is born
    Yet why am I sick to the bone
    To the divas lying on the streets?
    Because they were their depression
    As a new found fashion.





    Submitted on 2009-08-22 14:19:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      its very descriptive its really hard to understand until you read it a few times. at least for me. its not clumsy i liked it because the way it was written you have to really think about what the meaning behind it was. i wasnt focused so much on what point you were trying to get across as much as i was focused on trying to figure out what was going on in your mind. i still dont know but i like that phrase people wear depression as their fashion. thats true. never thought of that but it is so true.
    *joez*
    | Posted on 2009-08-23 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]

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