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    dots Submission Name: My Serenitydots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       Just a silly short poem i wrote some years back for a girl i used to love. Not my best work but i guess it also needs a place in the collection. Thoughts welcome.

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    dotsMy Serenitydots

    Thank you for being there for me...
    When i feel in need to flee.
    Always building feelings inside me...
    What you do is fill a hole, a hole in me.
    Thankyou for setting me free...

    Before i met you
    I thought i knew you...
    Never would i know
    You're soft as blue
    Able to heal wounds
    Through and through...

    My serenity
    Chases pain from me...
    She completes me...
    Never expecting from me...
    My serenity...
    Never condemning me...
    Ever supporting me....
    Her love is my decree.

    How did i deserve this?
    Ultimate completion
    without a twist...
    She fills me...
    Kills my thirst...
    She puts me first.
    Im in total bliss.
    God please tell me
    How to preserve this...

    I thank you serenity
    For starting this love spree...
    A place i can get lost in...
    When i need to hide away
    You give me a place to stay...
    Whenever i need to fly away.


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      the last two verses are great especially.

    "God please tell me how to preserve this..."

    "Thank you serenity for starting this love spree..."

    lovely lovely.

    funny thought, to have a love spree. i love that thought. the word "spree" sounds so carefree and joyful, it describes love well.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by Theophilus | [ Reply to This ]
      whoever she is hold on to her because this piece just proves how happy you are with her. i hope she gets to read this. i thought it was wonderful. you can tell you really let your feelings out. beautiful work. i loved it!
    | Posted on 2009-08-23 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]

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