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    dots Submission Name: Tiny Toysdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
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    Tiny Toys

    Such a small death
    The death of innocence
    It goes unmarked
    Into the quiet backdrop of social ills

    Such a tiny death
    With tiny hands and tiny feet
    That never could grasp
    What was happening

    It was but for the briefest of time
    A tale told wide eyed
    Only to be stricken in its prime
    The innocent death
    Of children

    And thereafter in the backwash of isolation
    Hangs the split
    And the trait
    Of always damaged
    Butterfly wings once touched
    Never get off the ground

    Broken before life had its chance
    And now
    A mere discarded toy
    Of transients thrill
    And perfections sickness
    The little hands and tiny feet
    Have to make their crooked way

    Such a small death
    The death of innocence
    It always goes unmarked and un-mourned
    Into the quiet backdrop
    Of cultural ills

    Submitted on 2009-08-23 07:49:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nice poem! well writen with supence and keeps the reader awake and wondering where is more what happens next?
    Flows purfectly with the title. Very catchy!

    loved it

    | Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]

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