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    dots Submission Name: lost.dots
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    Author: save me
    ASL Info:    19/F
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 26/51/53
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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    dotslost.dots
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    to feel relieved is only an imaginative state of mind.

    there is a cloud of idiocracy that overwhelms my lungs, encompassing them with a faint tinge of a thousand young souls.

    a foul smell of youth, wandering, lost.

    why is it that so many questions are left unanswered?

    why is it that i want answers to questions i don't hold?

    these feelings change, they alter, they fluctuate from moment to moment.

    to feel a sudden weight has been lifted off your chest in just a matter of minutes.

    to feel those thousand waves crashing down on you suddenly subside and ease the feeling of regret.

    all i can say is i'll never know, and neither will you.

    i'm left here with only one thing:

    confusion.




    Submitted on 2009-08-23 16:50:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm, it doesn't have a rythmn to me. The words dont flow but they are very powerful. It makes one think though.
    | Posted on 2009-08-25 00:00:00 | by extrEMO | [ Reply to This ]


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