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The cool fresh air

Author: my shadow
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The cool fresh air

Yesterday, I discovered
That we are infinitely insignificant
and that time,
as we know it,
is an illusion.
Yesterday, I wondered,
"What is left?"

This morning, I awoke
to hear birds voices
in the trees,
in the cool fresh air.
The dog stretched and yawned
in the new morning sun.

Submitted on 2009-08-24 02:13:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Brilliant! I like to think this says dabbling in weighty yesterdays is so much less than appreciating life as it unfolds. Very Zen like.
| Posted on 2013-04-04 00:00:00 | by strike three | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a fairly decent piece, though I believe you stopped short when you had more to say. When you write you should allow your keyboard to live beneath your fingers, and guide you to the words you try to hold back. Over all this was an ok write.

| Posted on 2012-01-08 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
  You know what I love about this? It reminds me of the beautiful moments that we take for granted, so simple, so ordinary so perfect.

I'm taking this one with me,

| Posted on 2011-08-30 00:00:00 | by WarmGun | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked the minimalism & how you liken insignificance to the dog laying in sunlight. It's thought provoking and says a lot.

Great as yours are!

Smiles to Share ;-)
| Posted on 2011-08-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked the minimalism & how you liken insignificance to the dog laying in sunlight. It's thought provoking and says a lot.

Great as yours are!

Smiles to Share ;-)
| Posted on 2011-08-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Very good, there is a seamans prayer, "OH Lord, my ship is so small and YOUR ocean is so large."
There may be more and the quote may be off a little, but it shows how we can be so small in a large universe and still not feel insignificant. We can enjoy our lives and only imagine what is in store for us in the hereafter.
| Posted on 2011-05-01 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
  Did this knowledge that we are insignificant somehow made things easier for you and this is why your day was so bright or did you change your mind upon seeing a beautiful day? One could ask himself after such a discovery how could the day turn out so beautiful? Significant or insignificant the sun still rises in the morning and makes the question of significance insignificant. My, what a knot!
| Posted on 2010-09-20 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
  It is both humbling and awe inspiring to contemplate how we are a part of a vast and complex universe. I think your delightful poem expresses that mood aptly.

Nice work.
| Posted on 2010-08-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  Something akin to the post below, I often try to fathom how big is big and how small is small, and how insignificant that makes us. Time is only a perception, that much is clear too. Personally, I tend to think that the fact that we are so insignificant, so mortal, and so fallable, is the only reason we can see any beauty in life at all. If we were more, perhaps everything else would be less to us. That seems like the imagery you were going for here. A very profound thought.
| Posted on 2010-06-03 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
  One estimate puts the number of neurons in the average human brain at 100 billion and the number of synapses at around 100 trillion. I try and remind myself of that when I feel that we're all insignificant. In reality we are quite miraculous. And on top of all that sometimes we remember to

". . . hear birds voices
in the trees"

and let ourselves feel the
in the cool fresh air caress our faces.

It's nice that you don't beat to death that idea that that is why we are all significant and life is better than the alternative.

| Posted on 2009-12-06 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting, isn't it, how life changes from day to day and our moods along with it? Your poem reminds me of the many times I've gone to bed feeling hopeless and woke up feeling hopeful again. It's a carousel ride of ups and downs for sure but we keep riding. Enjoyed the poem.
| Posted on 2009-11-10 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Ha ha ha. this poem seems to have a little comedy to it. But the message behind it is amazing. It seems you want to show that people take the small thing for granted and don't know how blessed they are to be alive. This piece showed all that needed to be shown and was simply magnificent.

| Posted on 2009-08-27 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
  very entertaing and catchy title that draws in the reader untill the end - has a great flow an stlye.

Loved it

| Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is how I felt when I first got sober.
I realizd that there is 24 hrs in a day not 12 or 9..
It took alot out of me. I ben sober 15days and am a recovering alcoholic. I can remember days that I would black out an couldnt remember where I was how I had gotten there or what I did the night before.

Glad to have another poem to relate to, it is a big blessing,


| Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]

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